What do you think of my poems?

Strong endings on both. I like that. As far as content, I think you're trying too hard to rhyme. All poems dont need to rhyme to sound good. I think you're trying to be vivid with your details but you need to be a bit more dramatic. Sell me!! I like how it flows. Your ideas clearly go from one place to another without confusion. All-in-all I think they are good, but work in progresses. I feel you can do better.